Saturday, April 30, 2016

Jason - Fantasy



On the writing

I found I really enjoyed the competition this week. It may be, as a friend of mine pointed out, that I so frequently make up and misuse words that I have come into my own. On the other hand, I really feel like doing this constant writing has knocked off quite a bit of the rust. I have enjoyed more and more the pieces both my brother and I have completed. This week I wrote a piece that as I started I tried to give the words a bit of a Anglo-Saxon feel. As I reworked the piece I found myself reading with a little bit of a Scottish brogue, for pronunciation, I recommend, you do the same.

"Attor-Skaeda"

Fog fennig, and the sliscous druck
Sunk and churled o’r gnollskin boot.
Gramort bullden of Hammerstruck
Sot the gleamling glinlin loot.

"Descry the Attor-Skaeda, my clan!
The venom’s drip and flapping wing!
Descry the atlas ink, and scan
The underdark confying!"

So heft your Ulfberht blades to sky:
Questlings the Skaeda Aur will seek—
No fear that they by poison die,
No share for those found meek.

And as in strackish pose he stares,
The Attor-Skaed, enshroud in shade,
Wind snakely through the rending tares,
And by scriptstones we played!

Slap, Flap! Slap, Flap! It leaps and ambles.
The Ulfberht steal splits caranew!
It cleaves some limbs, caught in brambles
Then fell the garagon slew.

"And thou hast slain the Attor-Skaed!
Come raise a glass, our boldsy lads!
O jubilize! Hoolal! Hoolade!"
The fare for clawhewn scads.

Fog fennig, and the sliscous druck
Sunk and churled o’r gnollskin boot.
Gramort bullden of Hammerstruck
Sot the gleamling glinlin loot.

Justin - Fantasy



About the writing

This was ridiculously hard for me because I like using realish words rather than fakish ones and unlike Carroll, I don’t have the drugs. Also, unlike Carroll, I do not have a fantasy story giving context to the many nonsense terms that I use so hopefully they are decipherable by internal clues. If not, hopefully it can be enjoyed for its soundishness.

Method wise, I developed a story about a pirate crew going after a sea monster, I then attempted to
write the nonsensical first stanza four times before deciding to write it straight and replace normal words with nonsense. When I requested my homeschooling wife assist me in making up words, I found out that one of the methods employed in learning to read is to give the kid nonsense words to practice sounding out without being tainted with meaning. So she offered lots of choices to fill in for real words. Enjoy

Mimsyskiffen

O’er moorig sloosh on slithig splaves
Where wox and walfins swid below,
Where grints await in sloshen javes
And man darrop to go.

“Beware the Mimsyskiff me crew!
The razor teeth and suckered limbs!
Beware the Flibflubs, and eschew
The grunious Pindernimms!”

With lopshots loaded in the breach,
Long hunted we our klimmery prey;
Made land upon a troolix beach
To plan another day.

And as we left the perene scape,
The Mimsyskiff, from watery hell,
Barred our exit from the cape,
Brannig our quest to quell.

One two! One two! The wintons flew
The lopshots mouths went bammenclack
We shot it down, and let it drown
And hauled one krenil back.

“Ye lads have slain the Mimsyskiff
Come raise a brock, ye noble men
Ah blecked day! Horrah! Horray!”
Bellowed the captain then.

O’er moorig sloosh on slithig splaves
Where wox and walfins swid below,
Where grints await in sloshen javes
And man darrop to go.

Sunday, April 24, 2016

Jason - Journey


On the Writing

I have to say, when Justin suggested we write an allegory, I thought he was crazy. As turns out I was right, I wrote everyday to get this done and it still need more refinement, but the time is up. The piece is completed, but still a little rough. The upswing is, over the course of this week my speed and endurance both increased, which is part of what I have wanted out of this exercise. As most allegories, this story has a few layers of meaning to it, so rather than tell you up front everything I intended, I think I would prefer you just read it. If you are so inclined, make a comment about what it means to you.

The Hunt

The single and jobless college student had such horrible posture that it would have pained anyone above the age of forty to see it, but he was alone. He was always alone. The only light in his room came pouring out of his TV and washed over him. He had flipped channels, but settled on nothing. His eyes were open, but it would be hard to call what he was doing watching.


It was because of this moment and the dozens just like it he had signed up for the contest. Shawn needed to live. He took a deep breath and thought about the last time he felt alive. It was four months ago and he just gotten word that he was a finalist. It meant they could start the game anytime. He would have no warning. So, for two hours he had packed a go bag, putting things in and pulling them back out. He check the weight and calculate how far he could get with just the bag.


At some point he realized the drivel he was watch in the dark had become an infomercial. Unconsciously, he reached down in front of the couch so he feel the nylon of that bag. He hoped for a spark of that energy, a reminder of the electricity he felt when he had packed it, but there was nothing. He could hear the whisper of his fingerprints along the material, but it did nothing for him. It had been four months afterall.


Shawn was on the edge of falling asleep with his hand still draped down to the bag. It was then the TV turned off. In fact, all the lights in the apartment, the red LEDs on the clock, the little round lighted symbols on the modem in the corner went dark. The power had been cut.


Just after they cut the power, the studio sent him the first rendezvous point. When the notification went off he twitched and pawed for the phone beside him. It was the only thing illuminated in the dark apartment. He straightened up, causing some crumbs to get dislodged from his shirt, pushed his glasses into reading position and then read the message. As the fog lifted from his brain he reread the message. “The Hunt Begins in one hour. 1600 Cork St.”


The shakes began in the hand that held the phone. He wanted to move in every direction at once. This was even better than packing. This was so much better than watching hours of old show footage on Netflix. This was better than practicing making a shelter or running yellow highlighter along safe backroads on printed out maps. In fifty three, make that fifty two minutes, he would be hunted, but somehow that also made him more free.


He knew immediately he had made it to the “launching pad”, as the show called the raised metal stage. He could see what he took to be contestants on one side. They talked to cameras and to each other. They were a blur of color and photo flashes. What were clearly the hunter stood on the other. They stood in wide, ominous stances in emotionless black masks. Intentionally terrifying. The “Launching Pad” where this dichotomy was so strong was always a spectacle for the show. Shawn had vivid memories of every time they zoomed out from that steal stage and “The Hunt” appeared over it. The bright television lights, the swarm of cars, the buzz of conversation, it enveloped and charged him. This was what he wanted.


Everything was a blur in the next few minutes. Shawn did his five minute, rapid fire, interview with the host. He was too distracted to notice she barely looked at him. From there he wandered on the stage trying to take in the dozens of conversations all at once. He steered clear of the hunters, hoping to minimize how much they saw his face and he found himself constantly readjusting his go bag. He imagined his life for the next few days or weeks. Shawn was ready to run.


He thought he would do it alone, but then he met Mary, such a plain name for a very un-plain girl. For some reason, of the contestants there, the jocks and the survivalists, the butch and the showboats, she had taken an interest in him. Every time he wandered to a new place on the stage, she wandered with him. Perhaps it was because she was beautiful or perhaps it was because she had first shown interest in him, but either way Shawn was hooked. He knew running alone was the way to go. Every thought, all of his planning was based on running alone, but when she suggested they should buddy up, he heard himself say, “Yes.”


The contest was simple. Well, it was simple to understand. The contestants would be released in just a few minutes and when they were a second timer started. That timer would mark the release of the hunters. The goal of the contestants was to be the last one left in the game. They could use any means at their disposal to hide and take flight, but algorithms were being run to look for any activity they might make on the internet, so if you go to the ATM, your location gets flagged, you check your email, flagged, by airline tickets, flagged. Also, they had a call in phone line and on-line reporting website where civilians were asked to report if they saw a contestant and if their call led to a capture they received a reward. The rewards climbed as the contest went on. So, while you could do anything you wanted, lots of things risked exposure. Based on past shows, about half of the captures were made from being reported on.


The recent winners had been those survivalist who could get deep in the woods and survive without need for electronics and little to no exposure to other people. Shawn, unfortunately, was not a survivalist. Even the shelt he had practiced making, leaked.


Shawn pulled the black nylon strap of his bag up a little higher on his shoulder. He were an olive green shirt and black pants, which he had tucked into his combat boots. Realizing just how long he might be wearing these things, he wished they felt a little more comfortable. He pulled Mary over to the corner to see if she had chosen a trail. For just a moment he really looked at her, red hair and blue eyes, slimmer and shorter than him. She wore jeans, tee shirt and a ball cap with a goofy cartoon flower. If it had been any other circumstance, he probably wouldn’t have even talked to her. As it was, there wasn’t much to talk about. She had no path. She just thought this would be fun and was along for the ride.


Why did he agree to buddy up? Oh, yeah, because he was an idiot.


Beep, beep, beeeeeeeeep! They were off. The contestants scattered off the launching pad and went in all directions. They ran like roaches into the dark. It would be two hours until the dark hunters, in their black shiny armor, were released.


Shawn knew by heart the first part of his trail. North, through the bean field until he got to the dirt road, at the dirt road he made a left and made the five mile hike to the edge of the expressway. He hoped the old bike he had stashed in the copse of trees was still there and still able to be ridden. From there he would have to plot a course that would now work for the two of them. They had to keep a quick pace and find a place to hide out.


When Shawn and Mary made it to the other side of the field, they paused for just a moment. It was dark, but they were looking to make sure they were alone. Too many runners coming this way would draw the hunters. “Do you see any of the others?” Mary said. Shawn’s eyes had adjusted to the darkness as they crossed the field, but the moon was obscured by the trees on the horizon, which left it far too dark to see very well. “I think we are alone,” he whispered. He could hear the steady heartbeat in his ears. “This way,” he pointed and started walking down the dirt road.


It took them twenty minutes to cross the field. If they were quick they could get to the bike and the decision point in about an hour and fifteen minutes. That would mean twenty five minutes to move before the hunters were released. If they were not sloppy, or better yet lucky, they would be in good shape. For a while they walked in quiet.


“Why did you sign up?” Shawn asked, picking up the pace, while he tried to avoid ruts and puddles.


“What?” Mary said puffing as she tried to keep up. “Oh, the show. My roommates and I all signed up. It was sort of a dare at first, then the videos were fun, then once we had gone that far we had to submit them. It doesn’t fill a gap or anything. I don’t have anything to prove. I’m just here because they called.”


Her answer galled him. He wasn’t sure why, but he wanted her to have this bigger purpose. He wanted her to say that for the first time she really felt alive. That they shared this thing, this feeling. He wondered how she could just be bouncing down the same path, like it was some fluke, while he was recognized it was his purpose. They couldn’t both be right. Could they? This was Shawn’s path to meaning. He pushed, challenging her to keep up.


She did. Mary had kept up that night. She took turns riding the bike down the road and into the woods that Shawn had selected. As he had suggested they did not see anyone. Before the sun rose, the two of them had found an abandoned house, mostly empty, dusty, but not yet taken over by vermon. At one point the next day, Shawn thought he had heard the motorcycles of the hunters, but that had been three days ago and they were both still in the game.


In the daytime they slept and kept their heads down, but they had come out every night to do a little foraging, seeing what was around them, trying to see if there was a way to get to transportation or more food. They both had money, but it was hard to spend it without seeing someone who would turn them in. They had not dared risk that, even though they had spotted a convenience store about a mile away. Last night it had rained which meant they left more tracks than usual. Shawn had almost kept them both in, but now they would have to move.


There was not a lot to do when they were away in the house, so they talked. Shawn had learned that Mary was a Starbucks barista and she loved her job. She didn’t want to do it forever, but she was fine doing it for now. She figured when it was time to move on, life would hand her something else. Things were good she thought, why struggle. Unlike Shawn she had only taken a few classes in college and she decided what was the point if there was nothing she really wanted to do. She floated and she was happy to just float. Shawn had told her how he had graduated four months ago, how he had his own place and was waiting to get a call back for one of the jobs he had submitted a resume. He had a Paper Engineering degree. A degree which promised him he would get a job which would make him decent money. He found himself explaining all of this and things about his family and childhood to Mary. She didn't tell him how boring she thought that sounded and in exchange Shawn didn’t tell her he thought Starbucks burned their coffee. Why spoil the conversation with unnecessary honesty. It was nice to not be alone.


They had consulted one of the maps Shawn had packed and decided move closer to the city. It was a risk, because of more people, but if they could get embedded there it would be easier to stay for a long time. They stepped out into the cool night and continued down the moist dirt road. Initially Mary road the bike. They didn’t talk, but it wasn’t quiet. The air was filled with sounds of crickets and the clicking of the chain on the gears and the sound of bigger creatures moving in the woods which the road divided. It seemed that Mary drove intentionally through the puddles and then laughed. He laughed too.


Just thirty minutes in they passed a house which, at first, was dark and quiet, but just as they moved past two black motorcycles started up. “Hunters!” Shawn shouted as they pulled out of the driveway. He couldn’t be sure with just the engine noise, but his heart knew. He jumped off the road and into the woods. Mary on the other had pedaled harder. “Come on,” he thought, but didn’t say. She was never going to outrun them. She didn’t make it very far away from him before the black armored men on their black painted bikes were right beside her. Shawn could see her silhouette, but he didn’t dare finish watching them take her. His only chance to get away was to cut through the woods now. He had to move while she distracted them.


He knew how this worked. They would be calling for backup, they almost certainly had seen him. This area would be swarming with hunters in just a few minutes. While he felt that punch of adrenaline telling him he was alive, it was different. His body was moving, but his mind was grappling with the facts. Mary would be back at her job, would be able to text her sister, would be back in her life soon, without him. He would be without her. Almost on autopilot, he ran through the dim woods. He ran to stay in the game, but he wished he could start the last three days over. He wished for what he couldn’t have, what didn’t make any sense. He didn’t love her, at least he didn’t feel what he thought of as love, but he didn’t want to do this alone. He was running for survival, but it was in the wrong direction. Mary was back there. She might have been bouncing carefree through life, striving for nothing, but she had rewritten his expectations.


After he had crossed the third road, with just a pinch of luck he found a deer stand in the middle of the woods. He climbed up to the seat high in the air. He couldn’t stay there, but it was a good place to get a feel for what was going on while he was catching his breath. For the moment he had made it. He watched the lights of the motorcycles swarm around him, threatening him and then move away.


The woods fell silent. Shawn cried.


Justin - Journey



About the writing


The toughest part about this piece was keeping the tone consistent. I tried to write it like it was spoken by a Cormac McCarthy character. I pegged down what I wanted to say fairly quickly but went back and forth a couple of times between too much and not enough. I think there is a balance in allegory where you start hinting at things you don’t mean or where you are so vague that you could be talking about anything. There’s also the balance between being way too obvious and being so layered and nuanced that no one can figure out what you’re talking about. If I fail on this scale it’s on the obvious side, but I’d rather it be understood than not, otherwise what’s the purpose.

On the Trail

I was born on the trails, everyone I know was. That may sound funny to you, but that’s how it is. I never thought much about it being strange, being on this epic journey, always moving, never settling. It was years before I wondered where we were going, if we were in fact going anywhere at all. It always seemed like we was preparing for something, about to get some place, but we just kept going; we still are.

The first couple years of my life I rode in the wagon, slept in the wagon, ate in the wagon. I guess if I’d of been asked, if I could of talked, I’d of said the whole world was a wagon. Now I guess I’d say it’s just a bunch of trails. Eventually I started walking by the wagon some, just a little at first. Staying close to the wagon, but being able to move around some. Seems strange to call it freedom, but I guess it was more free than riding. I started learning then a little about the trail; learned to look for sinkholes and to be careful when the scrub got too thick and too close. I learned from the ones driving the wagons and some of the older ones walking along beside.

Soon I started learning to watch a little further off the path; start looking for food and for danger. I’d tell the wagon masters if I thought I saw something and they tell me what it was; tell me those berries were alright to eat or that that animal couldn’t do us any harm. I started learning how things went together, how when I saw one type of shrub there was probably a snake near it, or a type of squirrel meant that there was certain edible nuts and berries. Sometimes these didn’t work out. Sometimes we would go looking for food after seeing a bunch of squirrels and we didn’t find it. We’d watch a wolf that was supposed to be dangerous and aggressive back away from the trail when it saw us coming. I started thinking that the hard rules I had learned about things maybe weren’t so solid. Maybe it was that this one thing usually means something but not always. I also learned to keep these thoughts to myself.

At a certain age, I was put on a mount and given instructions on how to scout. Sometimes off the trail looking for food or evidence of wildlife, predator or prey. Sometimes further up the trail to see what lay ahead and bring warning back to the wagons. It was then when everything was shaken. I would run into scouts from other wagons. At first I would veer off the trail and hide, wait for them to ride on. But one day I saw one reaching for some berries I knew were poisonous. I stepped out into the open and tried to stop him. He laughed at me; these berries aren’t poisonous. He threw back a handful while I watched in stunned silence then he told me something I’d never heard before. He pulled a book out of his saddle bag and showed me the shapes of different leafs. He said you could avoid the poison berries by color, but you’ll pass up a lot of good ones if you don’t look at the leaf shapes too.

When I got back to the wagon I asked around to see if anyone had ever heard about leaf shape, not just color had something to do with telling good berries from bad berries. I got a couple of strange looks, but no real answers. I decided if anyone did know, they weren’t talking and I should adopt the same policy. I started keeping my own book, trying to compile my own set of rules and knowledge. I started looking for other scouts when I was out, intentionally talking, trying to get any info I could. It was confusing. I ended up with so many different stories, so many different sets of rules many contradicting. One would say these berries are certain death, and another say they’re alright. Leafs and colors were just the start, everything was looked at two ways at least. These animals carry disease or make good pets. These trees have good wood for making tent poles or it will cause rashes.

I got to where I resented my training. I was taught some good things that surely kept me alive, but I was taught a lot nonsense too. The further I got with my book the more I felt I was starting from scratch. I had to look at each piece to see if it bore weight or not. See if there was any truth. Every piece of wisdom from my old wagon masters and everything I’d heard on the trails from other scouts was suspect. I wondered how I’d survived with such a mixed bag. And other people had it even worse like it was pure luck that they hadn’t killed themselves out in the woods.

I kept compiling and filtering and shaking out the truth the best I could but it wasn’t ‘til I was helping a new scout into the saddle for the first time that I realized something: I hadn’t arrived, no one has. I was taught by people doing the best they could. I learned some more from other people who were taught different from people also doing the best they could. And after all my efforts and all I’ve done to try to make it better and figure everything out, I’m still handing over an incomplete knowledge with some flawed thought processes. I thought when I was in the wagon and walking beside it that the wagon driver had it down. But now that I’m driving a wagon, I’m pretty sure they didn’t. I’m pretty sure like me they were learning as they went along.

I was on the trail with them, I was traveling with them but I thought they’d arrived and I held it against them that they hadn’t. But nobody arrives. We all just keep moving. Rider, walker, scout, wagon master, all traveling never arriving.

Friday, April 15, 2016

Jason - Painting

On the writing:

This week's writing was pretty enjoyable.  Blank verse is a challenge because the rhythm is important, but with no rhyme it is easy to select the exact words you are looking for.  To add to that fun this week, I have selected a painting with is fairly well known and the plan is to let you guess.  If you send me a guess I will let you know if you have guessed the painting correctly.  If you don't want to play the game, I hope you still enjoy the writing.

Mystery Painting


Obsidian and terra-cotta strokes
Lift dark tongues to celestial arcade.
The tenebrous column divides the fore
And conjures deep questions of what is real.
The valley floor is paved in crooked walls
With lighted panes of glass and leaning doors.
Uneven tiny houses gathering
Around the pitched empty unlit parish.
Sapphire flourish, chaotic wealds embrace,
A barrier between the men and peaks.
As waves about to roll into the trough
And crickets silence mournful harmonies.
Above the trees the shadow giants roam.
Cerulean summits slow lumbering
In front of darkly painted beryl buttes
Which form the slumberous horizon’s crease.
This vision blurs then fades as eyes take flight
To stars in eddies, joy’s hypnotic dance.
So bright the splendor blemished rings appear
And sleepless sight becomes the Muse’s gift.
The yellow crescent curves a bit too deep.
A lunar guardian to over watch
By spinning beams much greater than the stars.

She looks away and frees you from the frame.

Justin - Painting



About the Writing


This is about an actual event, though somewhat romanticized. There is, or was, a large portrait of a woman in a green velvet dress in the 19th century European art wing of the Detroit Institute of Arts. This is by far my favorite wing of the museum because this is where Monet and Degas and Van Gogh and all of those guys are, or at least some of their work. This painting is not by one of them. I actually don’t know the title or the artist, but I did spend entirely too long looking at it one afternoon, if one can actually spend too long examining a piece of art. It is hyper realistic and I found it captivating. It is not my favorite painting. It’s not even my favorite in that wing of that museum. But we shared a moment and that is what this is about.

A Woman in Green Velvet


I know I’m standing much too close to her
And staring at each detail of her dress
The velvet of it calls out to be touched
Temptation that I must fight to resist
And so I search in hopes to find a flaw
An unmasked brushstroke that might break the spell
Hard lines to show the velvet is not plush
A hint of something false within her eyes
To make it clear that she’s not looking too
I know she’s just a painting on the wall
Of oil on canvas is the velvet made
But still I cannot help but think that if
I did reach out the velvet I would feel
And if I touched her hand her gaze would shift
To see what impertinent one would dare
I carefully examine every inch
I wait for her to ask me not to stare
I wait for her to tire and sit down
I know she’s waiting ‘til my gaze has left
She will not yield as long as I still watch
I cannot leave until I know for sure
And so resigned I know that I must act
I have to break her spell that keeps me here
I check to see that we are here alone
And lift my hand to touch the dress’s hem
Extend one finger towards the velvet goal
And feel the roughness of stretched canvas there
Her spell is broken I can leave her now
But still she’ll haunt me with what might have been

Friday, April 8, 2016

Jason - Happiness



On the writing:

I picked the topic,happiness, this week. It seems so broad it should be easy to write on, but at this moment, if I am being honest, it is not. I could write something about cotton candy and rainbows, but there is nothing genuine about that. Every happiness right now is a complex bundle of happy and sad and guilt and loss. So, as best as I am able, I have tried to capture that in the acrostic below.  Overall, I would say I am happy with the result, but I have tried the change the ending to sound a little less trite, but this is the best I have gotten it to.


Happiness

“How are you doing?” is said so free,
Abscinding thoughts, exposing me.
Painting memories inside my mind
Pairing the past to present time.
“I had a quite successful day!”
No more than that, need I to say.
Except of course when good news came,
So did the dark which clouds my brain.
Sharing the joy I had inside
For her I always did provide.
Only there now comes no response,
Until the grief do I ensconce.
Now regard I the empty plate,
Despite the loss, my life is great!

Justin - Happiness



About the writing


I picked the form of acrostic this week, and have regretted it. Not really, but this was pretty hard. I am comfortable with the constraints of rhyme and meter that exist in traditional poetic forms; it seems much more cumbersome to me to have a fixed first letter that, if I decide to change, it means possibly changing a whole section. I fought this one quite a bit. In the end, because I did not want to change the acrostic, I sacrificed both meter and voice at times. By voice I mean that the language is at times very modern and common and other times more formal. I started knowing that I wanted to examine the pursuit of happiness versus contentment and so planned a transition from hopelessness to hope. Content wise, I like the result. I would have liked to have made the transition earlier in the piece, but I think it works well with the hope/contentment section being shorter.

While writing this I was thinking of 1 Timothy 6:6

Happiness

Happiness, you devil fleetly running,
A taunting dancer just outside of reach;
Pursuit takes the greatest wits and cunning,
Perchance the dream’s defenses for to breach.
In knowing that the hunted thing cannot
Negate the longing of the discontent;
Even capture brings not the joy it aught
(Searching for more, as more, more want ferments.)
Still we chase in greedy hopes of capture
Ideals of what we think that life should be,
Silencing all evidence which fracture
Belief in what we hope that we might see.
Enjoying not all with which we are blessed,
Instead pursuing foolishly fraught gains.
Never finding peace, never finding rest,
Going still for more regardless of the pains.
Could we instead look at all that we’ve got?
Or of the ways our needs have all been met?
Not looking for that mythical gold pot,
To joy in simple things we’ve earned with sweat.
Enjoying what we have pursuit may cease,
No more to chase a taunting devil running,
To be content in happiness and peace.